I found the following:
- I need to use more analytical language through out my piece of writting
- I need to including more detail when describing camera shots, actions, expressions and whats going on
- I need to reveiw certain details that make the scene in more depth
- I need to add a screen shot or two for the vewier to see what im describing
- I need to reveiw on what effect they are trying to give off and there reasons why
- I need to word my sentences better to get my point across easier
After seeing my peers work and analyizing my own work, it will help me improve my own analytical piece of writting and progress to writting better reveiws.